Wednesday, November 08, 2006

Five high school friends hanging out on Friday the 13th, doesn’t seem so abnormal does it? Well that’s what Melissa, Gabi, Jordan, Alec, and Max thought too.

Friday the 13th started off like any normal Friday for these five friends. School was same as always, lots of class work and homework. They lived in a small town called Tree Hill in North Carolina. Near Melissa’s house there is a vacant lot with woods behind it. When Melissa was little she went with her dad into the woods and saw this strange house. They didn’t go too close but she and her dad got a pretty good look at it. The house looked abandoned and really old. Just recently she had retold this story to her four other friends and they decided to go back to that house but had no idea the history behind the house.

Gabi was the first to arrive at Melissa’s house at 6’o’clock. Then Jordan, Alec, and Max arrived shortly afterwards. Melissa and Gabi were in no hurry to go to this creepy house but the guys were so eager. They set out at 6:30 and headed across the empty lot. Everyone was dressed in black so they wouldn’t be caught trespassing. Now as this was happening Alec’s crush on Gabi was growing. As everyone reached the house, cautious not to get too close, he was determined to finally get Gabi’s heart by being the brave man he’s not. As they were discussing who was going in first, without fully thinking his plan, Alec walked closer and closer to the old, rotten house. As he took his first step onto the porch of the house, it creaked and got everyone’s attention. He did not dare to look behind him for he could feel everyone’s eyes burning holes his back. He just kept walking and opened the door, slowly turning the knob. First he stuck his head in, then his whole body. When he finally was inside the dark house, he thought to himself “I did it, I’m inside, Gabi must think I am so brave and she will start to like me. “Yes!” he thought, and then he screamed, “AHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!” Everyone outside just laughed because they thought he was probably playing a trick and pretending to be scared. But two minutes passed and still no sign of Alec. “Alec! Jokes over, you can come out now!” Melissa yelled. Still no answer. “Uh oh”, everyone thought.

Melissa, Gabi, Jordan and Max, the remaining four got in a circle to discuss what they were going to do to save their friend. They have two choices. One; have everyone go in and save him themselves or two; call the cops, risk getting in to trouble for trespassing and the risk of the authorities not believing them. Five minutes passed and they all agreed they would go in together and bring Alec back. At least that’s what they were hoping to accomplish.

Everyone links arms and heads into the house together. They are all scared but as determined as ever to save there friend. As they enter, they hear the floors creak and screaming and footsteps. This is not what they expected. Hearts were pounding, palms were sweating, and eyes were darting back and forth across the room of the empty house. “AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!”

Friday the 14th, headlines in the newspaper read “5 Teens, 2 Screams, Missing in Action.”

9 comments:

Njp1092 said...
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Njp1092 said...

Great word choice. also great how you described the how alec felt about that girl, it made it seem more realistic. Also the last paragraph was suspenseful. Also the sound effects when he stepped on the wood, that made it more scary! great story.

CF101 said...

Good story I liked how you made it sound scary. I thought it was cool how you had such good deatail throughout the story. Especially when you were explaining the house. It made it sound creepy.Good story.

AM said...

I liked the story because it is Friday the Thirteenth which makes it more scarier. I think you should add more dialog and detailes, specially when thay are in the house like what they see...
Great Story though!!!

nsj said...

I enjoyed your story alot. The only thing i didn't like was at the end you left me hanging. I wish i could of found out whta heppened to alec and the other four friends. Otherwiser, goo word choice.

aac said...

I think that this sentence was a perfect example of an idium. He could feel everyone's eyes burning holes in the back of his head. at the bottom you need to change the date to Saturday the 14th because earlyer in the story you said it was Friday the 13th.

jp11 said...

Good story. I liked how the house, which they went into, was described. The last paragraph made me want to know what happened to the kids.

MCR said...

This was a good story. I really like it when the friends were thinking a loke was being played on them but it was not.

M.M293 said...

Good story. I like the word choice and how the setting was thought out. Very scary and left us hanging. Good job!