Monday, November 06, 2006

“Best Friend Betrayal”

“So what time am I allowed to come over?” Sally questioned her friend Betty.
“Sally, we’ve been best friends since the first grade. You’re like family and it doesn’t matter what time you get here.” Betty Stated.
“Okay, let me get changed and I’ll be on my way.” stated Sally.
Betty and Sally have been friends since the first grade. Most people would assume they get into fights over the most stupid things since they’re teenage girls. Both of them go shopping together, hang out everyday and are always on the phone. I guess you can say that the two of them are always with each other but just never seem to get sick of each other.
Betty is having an enormous get together at her house tomorrow and is inviting everybody in her grade. She called and asked Sally if she wanted to sleepover her house and help her decorate for the big day. Sally told Betty she would call her right back because Sally needed to ask her parents if she was allowed to go. Knowing her own parents, they would either be in the living room watching TV, or in the library reading a book. Sally walked into the living room but the TV was of. After realizing that nobody was in there, she examined the library, but her parents weren’t there either.
When Sally noticed her parents weren’t home, she decided to start walking since she didn’t have a ride. Although it was dark, the brave girl told herself nothing would happen and before she knew it, it would be party time. While Sally was walking out the door, her ears didn’t hear a silent smash, but a shatter of sound. At first the nervous teenager did not now what it was but soon figured out that it was just a branch falling from the big oak tree on her own front lawn.
Walking slightly startled now, the female looked back at her house and saw something. Maybe she was crazy, but her eyes saw a shadow and the person had a knife in his hand. Since she saw the man, her pace started picking up. The girls ears started to hear footsteps behind her back and the hands of the teenager were starting to get sweaty. It was five minutes since she turned her head, so her curiosity decided to look again. Just how people say, curiosity killed the cat. As soon as Sally turned her head, the blue eyes saw a man right behind her, wearing a mask that had burned skin all over it. “Ahhhhh!” Sally screamed, trying to run faster but the man grabbed the arms of the teenager and covered the loud mouth. He soon injected a needle into the poor body that was as long as a tall guys foot and made Sally pass out.
Lost at were she was, Sally gazed around the place she was dumped at but couldn’t recognize anything. She soon figured out that her body was tied down to a table. Both her hands and bother her feed were wrapped by rope and tape. As she looked -frightened- around the extremely small white room, Sally noticed a lot of oversized mirrors but no windows of light. Her eyes looked down towards the side of her shivering, cold, naked body and saw other people’s legs, arms, and even heads!
Panicking now, the nervous girl looked up behind her head, and saw a huge black cloth covered body with a sharpened knife in one hand. Nervously, Sally questioned him why she was bought to this miserable place and what he wanted from her. The mysterious body did not answer at first, but than mumbled something under his breath. The person’s voice sounded so familiar, almost like a person that Sally was extremely close to. Begging the guy, she asked if he could please repeat himself, but he didn’t. Moments later, he took the knife and put it lightly on the poor girls stomach.
The knife tickled the ticklish girl at first, but than he started to put more pressure onto it. It soon slid into Sally’s nervous and damp skin and she watched every second of this tragic moment. Blood was gushing everywhere and the miserable female could feel every ounce of pain. She started to kick and scream but doing that didn’t do anything but make the man even more angry.
He than jabbed his hand into the open wound. As soon as he took his hand out, he had Sally’s livers in his hand and she watched him rip them out, screaming in agony. The killer than took off the black cloth from his and Betty’s friend saw a mask. Black burned bubbling skin, was what the mask had on it. He than took off the mask. The person who was trying to kill Ms. Innocent was the person that she had been friends with since the first grade, Betty. Sally questioned her best friend why she was trying to kill her but she didn’t answer, all she did was laugh.
Betty’s laugh was irritating to the ear. It was similar to an annoying ringer on your phone when people call you. Suddenly, Sally woke up and noticed it was all a dream but, looking at her phone, Betty was calling.

5 comments:

KT said...

This is a really good story! I like it because you had alot of action in it! Why would her best friend try to kill her its got a good theme to it, it actully kind of scared me. I like the word choice like the Blood was gushing every where and the word jabbed. It is a really good story!!!!!!!!!

VS said...

I liked how you used dialogue in your hook. It really grabbed my attention. Your ending was also pretty good. If you hadn't have ended it so quickly and kept going, I would defiantly still read it :]

CF101 said...

I liked the story alot. It kept me wanting to keep on reading. It was also very detailed throughout the sotry especially when you talked anout all the human body parts in that house. I also thought the ending was awesome. Great Story!

jp11 said...

I like this story it made me want to read more when the person attacked the girl. I thought it was funny that the story ended that she woke up from a dream.

MCR said...

That was a great story. You don't need to change a thing. THe part I liked the most was when she woke up and saw that Betty was calling.