Wednesday, November 08, 2006

In life a lot of scary things happen.

Certain people die from diseases or from being murdered.

You would never expect somebody to die they way Alex did.

The death of Alex was like no other.

To start off, Alex was going camping.

She goes camping each and every year, for the past six years now.

This year happened to turn out different from the other years.

Every year was lightly and breezy outside.

This year it was pitch black outside and really breezy.

She wasn’t expecting the scariest thing ever.

Then, Alex started getting hungry for some dinner.

She had forgotten to bring any food or snacks.

So, she decided to go fishing in the murky lake water.

“Plop”, every time she cast the fishing pole into the lake, it would make a plopping sound.

The murky lake water reminded Alex of dirty paint water.

She caught four chunky fish.

She got lucky because they had more than enough meat on them.

Alex cooked all four of those meaty fish.

This is when things started going wrong.

After, Alex had eaten all of those fish, she went to sleep.

Then all of a sudden Alex woke up an hour later.

She got up and looked around herself.

There were worms everywhere.

Worms were creeping and crawling out of Alex’s body.

She looked down at her legs, it looked like her legs were screaming in disgust.

Alex started to panic.

She was so confused why worms were crawling out of her body.

Then it hit her like a baseball in the face.

When she cooked the fish, they were still raw.

The fish were cooked wrong so it caused her to get tape worm.

Alex ended up losing a lot of weight.

Worms were wandering all over the world.

She stayed home and lay in bed.

She was too freaked out to go to the hospital.

Who knows what they would have to do to her.

Then, one day it happened.

Alex died from having tape worm and doing nothing about it.

The worms ate her up as fast as fast as they could, and killed her.

5 comments:

RSS said...

This was deffinately original, I don't think anyone has ever used worms as a way to kill someone...Ugh, kinda gross, no? You used backround so it justified why she was there. Good descriptions. Good story.

aac said...

You might want to change the word light in the following sentence. Every yearwas lightly and breezy outside.You also have a couple spelling mistakes.You also need to add some of the S.O.A.P. like alliteration.Then it hit her like a baseball in the fence was the simile I liked.

cmg0125 said...

I liked the way that you used the worms to kill Alex. Also, you described things really well like when you said the "murky lake water" and "chunky fish." Good job. =)

MCR said...

THis story was intresting. Different. But it was good. The ting that you could of changed is you don't tell so much detail.

ChristinaL said...

I love the idea and concept of the the worms (and her own lack of preparation) killing her.
If she goes camping all the time, why would she forget food, though?
Also, the plopping of the fishing line into the murky water was great--perhaps this should be higher up so you can start with a stronger hook.