Monday, November 06, 2006

THE ABANDONED HOUSE

“Come on you babies!” Brian pleaded as he and Mike pushed Justin, Scott, and Jessica towards the house, “Go in already!”
“Ok, ok we’re going” Scott answered as he cautiously walked up the steps to the abandoned house.
“Aren’t you two coming in with us?” Justin asked Mike and Brian. He opened the door and walked inside, and Scott and Jessica followed.
“Yeah, yeah we’ll be right behind you” Mike smiled and winked at Brian. Mike and Brian walked up the steps and, at the right moment, reached for the opened door and held it shut. “Get the branch over there” Mike ordered Brian. Brian retrieved it and gave it to Mike.
"Ew there is a swarm of ants on that stick! Get me another one." Brian threw the stick on the ground and picked up another one, then handed it to Mike."How is this one servant?" Brian answered sarcastically. "Clean as a whistle" Mike proclaimed.Mike took the stick and stuck it in between the door handles.
“Let us out!” Scott, Justin, and Jessica all screamed in unison as they banged repeatedly on the door.
“So long suckers!” Mike yelled as he and Brian ran away laughing.
“So are we just going to leave them there forever?” Mike asked then stopped running to catch his breath.
“We’ll come back in the morning” Brian answered. “Now hurry up!”
“Well I should have seen that coming” Jessica said to no one in particular. She walked through the dark living room and peered out a window. “It’s getting dark! I’m going to be in so much trouble.” She tried opening the window but it wouldn’t budge. “I was supposed to be home by 7:00. Does any one have the time?”
“It’s um…” Scott mumbled as he reached for his phone in the dark, “It’s 8:45.” “I’m dead” Jessica stated as she took a seat on the floor next to Justin. “Why did we agree to this again?” Jessica asked.
“Yeah, why did we agree to this Scott?” Justin asked.
“I don’t know but instead of blaming me can we please find a way out of here first?” Scott insisted. All of a sudden, BANG! they heard a crash as loud as a gunshot come from down the hall.
“Did you hear that?” Jessica whisper yelled, “Were all going to die!”
“Oh relax” Justin said, “Is any one in here?” he yelled. There was no answer. Jessica walked over to the couch and sat down, and Scott followed her. Out of nowhere the phone on the kitchen wall rang. Jessica fell off the couch.
“No one has lived here for over 10 years! Does this house even have a phone number?” Jessica asked.
“Well don’t just stand there” Scott said impatiently, “answer the phone.” Justin slowly walked over to the phone and picked it up.“Hello?” His voiced cracked. He heard steady breathing on the other line. “Hello… HELLO!”
“Just hang up!” Scott insisted, “Its probably Mike and Brian trying to scare us to death.”
“Yeah but there’s just one problem…” Jessica started, “THEY DON’T HAVE THE PHONE NUMBER!!!”
“She’s right; no one has lived here since I was 5. The number can’t be in phone books.” Justin replied.
“Well I’m getting to the bottom of this” Scott called as he ran down the hall and Justin followed closely behind him.
“Don’t leave me here!” Jessica pleaded as she ran after them.
“Its so dark, I cant tell if my eyes are opened or closed!” Justin said as he felt around the walls.
“Just feel around for a door. There should be one to the back yard some where” Scott found what felt like a handle and pulled. A door opened and brought them into another hallway. There was a door on the ceiling that led into an attic. The door was open but the ladder had been pulled away.
“SOME ONE IS IN THE HOUSE!!!” Jessica wailed.
“Well if you don’t keep quiet that some one is going to find us!” Justin angrily shot back.
“We would be out of here already if you two would stop fighting” Scott said as he stepped through the doorway, “Now come help me find a way out.” Justin followed him and as soon as he stepped through the doorway the door shut and trapped Jessica in the hallway laughing in her face. “HELP!” Jessica begged. Justin and Scott both tried to open the door but it wouldn’t budge.
“Were going to find something to open the door just relax and wait here” Justin assured her as he ran into another room.
“Easy for you to say! Your not the one trapped in the dark all alone here!” Jessica said on the verge of a panic attack.
“Come help me Scott” Justin ordered and Scott left to find him. Jessica sat with her back to the closed door and waited for them to come back. After what seemed like 5 hours, Jessica saw someone slowly slithering towards her.
“Scott?” she questioned the mysterious figure, “Justin?” The figure continued walking straight for her slowly. She closed her eyes and when she reopened them, the figure was gone. She got up and tried to find her own way out. She walked to the beginning of the long hall when she heard the breathing Justin described when he answered the phone. She turned around to see the dark figure standing at the end of the hall. It just stood there staring a hole into Jessica’s head with it beady eyes. Jessica tried to move but she couldn’t; she was paralyzed with fear. The figure started limping over to her. It got closer and closer and then it was standing right in front of her. Before she had a chance to scream she fell into a deep, deep sleep.
“We should go back and try to help Jessica” Justin pestered.
“We cant go back and help her until we find something to open the door” Scott answered, “Do you hear something?” There was a dripping noise coming from the room to their left. The door was shut and there was a light coming from the crack of the door on the floor. Scott opened the door and almost fainted.
“Shut the door!” Justin screamed but Scott didn’t move. Jessica was hanging upside down and her tomato red blood was dripping on the floor. On the wall behind her in big bloody letters it said, “YOUR NEXT”
Justin pulled Scott out of the doorway and slammed the door, “We have to get out NOW! Follow me” Justin ran around the maze of hallways and Scott followed petrified.
“What’s that?” Scott Pointed into the darkness. He felt for the handle and pushed as hard as he could. The door opened and brought them into the back yard. “Were out!” He beamed. Justin ran to the gate and tried to unlatch the lock.
“HELP!” Scott screamed. Justin turned around to see a dark figure walking towards Scott. Justin opened the gate door and yelled for Scott to follow him. Justin ran out of the yard and ran into the driveway. He didn’t look back until he was on the other side of the street. He heard the gate slam and he turned around to ask Scott something but he wasn’t there. He was trapped in the yard. Justin ran down the street but stopped dead in his tracks when he heard a torturous scream. Then came the breathing. The same breathing he heard on the phone in the house. He whipped his head around to see the figure limping straight for him, dragging the corpse of Scott in one hand, and a bloody tool in the other.
Justin tried to escape but he wasn’t quick enough for the figure, and he didn’t even have the chance to scream.
“Where were you last night?” Mike asked Brian as they walked up the steps to the house, “I called you as soon as I got home and I kept calling for like 5 hours and you didn’t pick up! I had to tell you something really important.”
“I was …uh….. Busy” Brian mumbled.
“Riiiiight…. And what happened to your foot?” Mike pointed at Brian’s bloody leg, “You’ve been limping all the way here”.
“Why are you asking me so many questions?” Brian yelled full of rage.
“Ok, ok relax! I was just wondering if…..”Mike trailed off as he rushed into the house, “Never mind lets just go get the losers.”
“Lets.” Brian smiled and locked the door behind them.

3 comments:

HG said...

I think your story is very interesting because its kind of a throw off because you would have never knowns who the real culprit was.good job.

ABG said...

You had a lot of good dialouge throughout your story and you keep me guessing sbout who the killer is until the end.

AM said...

I think your story is very suspicious, and would have never guessed the one who locked the 3 kids in, Brian, was the killer. I t was the best story! I specially love the end, when Brian and his friends go back to get the kids they locked in and Brian locks the door behind them and I think we all know why... haha